Feedback

Animatic Week 1

Student 1 Feedback:

  • Line the breaks in the audio
  • Quite literal, try to make visuals that make you want to know more – Be metaphorical
  • Simplify scenes especially since using subtitles – can be too cluttered.

Student 2 Feedback:

  • Record white noise so more clarity in front and end of recording.

Rob Feedback:

  • Give context it is not just the base story.
  • Great Subject
  • Talk about the odd details that makes the experience haunting.
  • Use the idea of giving sweet to little girl which is a strong image.
  • Can be English or use Subtitles – possibly try both.
  • No need to include everything – Just one important cut of it.

Animatic Week 2 ( Absent due to being ill )

Animatic Week 3

Rob Feedback:

  • Think about the tone of the action sequence.
  • Don’t rush the Tsunami scene.
  • Add environmental sound effects – so we know where we are .
  • Think about animation style.
  • EQ the Voice Over

Animatic Week 4

Sylvie Feedback

  • Carry on looking into different ways of approaching the story and shorten it , maybe cut out dream.
  • Look into Metamorphosis, different brush strokes to represent Tsunami can be cool.
  • Do not be too logical, try play with fiction where applicable as it is animation.
  • If continuing the dream, why not make the animation dream like visually.
  • Great sound choice.
  • Draw more clearly.
  • Look into a silent film suits screenplay.

Student Feedback:

Animatic Week 5

Rob Feedback:

  • Maybe cut dream out, start off with train scene
  • A cinematic train scene can be worked on
  • Blend scenes well and work on the girl and man.
  • The camera being given to girl should be captured more.
  • Maybe add one or two voice tracks if helps.

Animatic Week 6

Sylvie & Student Feedback:

  • Less music at end
  • Maybe have one person drowning
  • Maybe he dropped the photo accidentally before seeing it.
  • Disaster last too long
  • Change sound for train from far behind gloriossa flower
  • Sound fx need better control it’s bit louder than it needs to be.

Week 7

Rob feedback:

  • Show the girl with teddy maybe
  • Add voice track at beginning
  • Show the ocean atmosphere to build tension more
  • Teddy could hang on a metal piece
  • Show signs that he’s going to meet her at beach eg voice track
  • Start building

26th March (Rob)

  • Add the girl ref more
  • Try include 3D to an extent when appropriate

30th March (Sylvie)

  • Start animating straight away
  • Try different brushes
  • Spend 30 min just trying metamorphosis
  • Spend a week animating lines

2nd April (Rob)

  • Start animating no more overthinking
  • Try two different style 3 second sequences (max 2 days)
  • Just get on with it and make the film

30 April (Rob)

  • Finish Animatic reduced version 2min.
  • Think about colour palette when using B/W as one or two elements could do better with use of colour.
  • Think about scenes you need and don’t.
  • Try to focus more on the emotional link between father and daughter.

30 April (Sylvie)

  • Try more animation, go free with brush.
  • Work on Sound editing, spend much more time on editing too.
  • Research Sound and styles.
  • Think about technique I want to learn more.
  • USE SOUNDLY PRO