Animatic Week 1
Student 1 Feedback:
- Line the breaks in the audio
- Quite literal, try to make visuals that make you want to know more – Be metaphorical
- Simplify scenes especially since using subtitles – can be too cluttered.
Student 2 Feedback:
- Record white noise so more clarity in front and end of recording.
Rob Feedback:
- Give context it is not just the base story.
- Great Subject
- Talk about the odd details that makes the experience haunting.
- Use the idea of giving sweet to little girl which is a strong image.
- Can be English or use Subtitles – possibly try both.
- No need to include everything – Just one important cut of it.
Animatic Week 2 ( Absent due to being ill )
Animatic Week 3
Rob Feedback:
- Think about the tone of the action sequence.
- Don’t rush the Tsunami scene.
- Add environmental sound effects – so we know where we are .
- Think about animation style.
- EQ the Voice Over
Animatic Week 4
Sylvie Feedback
- Carry on looking into different ways of approaching the story and shorten it , maybe cut out dream.
- Look into Metamorphosis, different brush strokes to represent Tsunami can be cool.
- Do not be too logical, try play with fiction where applicable as it is animation.
- If continuing the dream, why not make the animation dream like visually.
- Great sound choice.
- Draw more clearly.
- Look into a silent film suits screenplay.
Student Feedback:
Animatic Week 5
Rob Feedback:
- Maybe cut dream out, start off with train scene
- A cinematic train scene can be worked on
- Blend scenes well and work on the girl and man.
- The camera being given to girl should be captured more.
- Maybe add one or two voice tracks if helps.
Animatic Week 6
Sylvie & Student Feedback:
- Less music at end
- Maybe have one person drowning
- Maybe he dropped the photo accidentally before seeing it.
- Disaster last too long
- Change sound for train from far behind gloriossa flower
- Sound fx need better control it’s bit louder than it needs to be.
Week 7
Rob feedback:
- Show the girl with teddy maybe
- Add voice track at beginning
- Show the ocean atmosphere to build tension more
- Teddy could hang on a metal piece
- Show signs that he’s going to meet her at beach eg voice track
- Start building
26th March (Rob)
- Add the girl ref more
- Try include 3D to an extent when appropriate
30th March (Sylvie)
- Start animating straight away
- Try different brushes
- Spend 30 min just trying metamorphosis
- Spend a week animating lines
2nd April (Rob)
- Start animating no more overthinking
- Try two different style 3 second sequences (max 2 days)
- Just get on with it and make the film
30 April (Rob)
- Finish Animatic reduced version 2min.
- Think about colour palette when using B/W as one or two elements could do better with use of colour.
- Think about scenes you need and don’t.
- Try to focus more on the emotional link between father and daughter.
30 April (Sylvie)
- Try more animation, go free with brush.
- Work on Sound editing, spend much more time on editing too.
- Research Sound and styles.
- Think about technique I want to learn more.
- USE SOUNDLY PRO